As the planet loomed closer, ever expanding against the great void, Sci, inside his tiny starfighter, streaked towards his objective. The peaceful, smooth thrust of his craft sailed him onward as the the warmth of the far-distant star began to warm his cockpit.
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I like the pic, but dude, that wasn't even a full paragraph to go with it. ;)
I'm trying to change up my style - from uber-verbose, to simple, punchy, stylism. =)
=P
You're not uber-verbose... If you're verbose in any respect, it's because you use such long compound sentences. 2 long compound sentences does not a proper paragraph make. :P I think you'd do better to break them up, but that's me...
Yeah, well. I've always been comma happy. Just be happy I change up the rhythm every now and then with periods and question marks and stuff. =P
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